IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3229 – Band 6.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year.

Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

Explain why you think you would be suitable for the job

Say what else you could do for the family

Give your reasons for wanting the job

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Education, Family and Relationships, Task 1 Letter, Work and Employment, Writing samples

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Candidate’s Response:

Dear Mr. and Mrs. Johnson,

I am writing to respond to your advertisement posted on the internet. I want to express my interests regarding teaching Hindi to your children.

I am a private tutor in Toronto, and I have been teaching Hindi for 3 years to the various children with different age groups. I have been awarded several times and nominated for the most expert Hindi tutor in my local area last year. I am wondering that I can be a good fit to teach your children.

As I heard, you have a family business in Sydney, and obviously you should be snowed under with paperwork. A couple of years ago, I had been an office administrator in one of the highest profile companies located on the heart of Toronto. Therefore, I can assist you with organizing the meetings, sending mails and answering your emails while your children are at school.

Honestly, I need this job to gain more experiences, broaden my horizons, and set my earnings aside as I am planning to travel to the Europe to visit my friends.

I am vigorously looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Kind regards,

193 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

July 3, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently

6.0 there may be inconsistencies in tone

7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended

9.0 presents a clear purpose

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

7.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

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Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The letter could use more accurate words which can match the context in tone.
Task Achievement (TA):
Addresses all parts of the task.
Presents a clear position but may lack some detail.
The tone is mostly appropriate, though could be more engaging and convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion (CC):
Information and ideas are arranged coherently, with a clear overall progression.
Uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within paragraphs may be mechanical at times.

Lexical Resource (LR):
Uses an adequate range of vocabulary, though some errors in word choice and usage are present.
May have occasional errors in spelling and/or word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA):
Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms.
Some grammatical errors are present, which may cause slight difficulty for the reader.

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The 6.0 sample upgraded to 7.0+

Dear Mr. and Mrs. Johnson,

I am writing in response to your advertisement seeking a tutor for your children to learn Hindi. I am excited about the opportunity and believe I am well-suited for the role.

I am a private tutor based in Toronto with over three years of experience teaching Hindi to children of various age groups. My teaching methods have been highly praised, and last year, I was nominated for the "Most Expert Hindi Tutor" award in my community. This experience has equipped me with the skills necessary to effectively teach Farsi to your children.

Additionally, I understand that you manage a family business in Sydney and may need extra help with administrative tasks. In my previous role as an office administrator at a leading firm in Toronto, I gained valuable experience in organizing meetings, managing correspondence, and handling emails. I would be happy to assist with these tasks while your children are at school.

I am eager to take on this job not only to expand my teaching experience but also to broaden my cultural horizons. The opportunity to immerse myself in a new environment and save for a future trip to Europe is highly motivating for me.

I look forward to the possibility of working with your family and hope to hear from you soon.

Kind regards,

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