IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3222 – Band 6.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch.

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

Say what the participants liked about the hotel

Explain why they were unhappy about the hotel

Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

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Candidate’s Response:

Dear Sir

I am writing regarding the food that was served in your hotel. Having had a meeting on 5^th September with the members of company, they announced that the space of your lobby in your hotel was spacious, and the architechture of your interior design was impressive that lead them to having a sense of positive energy. The members could exchange their ideas about work with a way of calmness and it emerges with consent smile on their faces.

But after a while when the food was served and finished, my employees expressed their dissatisfaction about the food. They said that the food was not fresh and delicious, and the ingredients of the dish were not well cooked; especially, the rice of that special dish was rare as well as the meat was tough, thus, it could not be digested very easily.

I suppose that it would be appreciated to alter some sectors which are related to cooking, for example, those who supply the material for cooking. Moreover, it would be perfect if the chef could be more cautious about the dish to be fresh and well cooked.

I will appreciate you if you take these considerations into account, to make a difference in positive view.

Best regards

209 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

November 29, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

6.0 addresses the requirements of the task

7.0 with the tone consistent and appropriate

7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended

6.0 presents a purpose that is generally clear

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

6.0 there is a clear overall progression

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

6.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The tone is formal, but the letter is full of redundancies. This letter is a good example of a text that requires more samples of real English sentences, structures, and words that actually appear in such a circumstance.

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The 6.0 sample upgraded to 7.0+

Dear Sir/Madam

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to express our appreciation for hosting our recent all-day meeting at your hotel. Participants were delighted with various aspects of the hotel's facilities and services. The comfortable meeting rooms, excellent audiovisual equipment, and the attentive staff all contributed to the success of our event.

However, I must also address an issue that emerged from our participants' feedback - their dissatisfaction with the lunch provided during the meeting. The participants were particularly dissatisfied with the limited choices and taste of the dishes served.

To improve the dining experience for future events, we kindly suggest you consider expanding the menu options, ensuring the quality of ingredients, and paying attention to flavor profiles. This will help ensure that the food aligns with the high standard set by your hotel's other services.

We value our partnership with your establishment and believe that addressing this issue will only enhance the overall experience for our attendees.

Thank you for your attention to this matter. We look forward to a continued positive relationship between our companies.

Regards

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