IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3214 – Band 6.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about the job in a local company that might be suitable for him or her.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves

say why you think the job would be suitable for him or her

how to apply for the job

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Culture and Traditions, Task 1 Letter, Work and Employment, Writing samples

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Candidate’s Response:

Dear Alex,

I am writing to you about your request concerning finding a job in Turkey which is my residential area.

After graduation from university in Italy where we were both studing software engineering for a couple of years, i could find a position in engineering company related to production of accounting software. In this company, there is a empty vacancy for a programmer who can work on MATLAB environment which is very outdated these days; anyway, as i knew you as a result of having strong relationship which has been created in Italy when we were going to university, i was aware that you are very professional at working on MATLAB language, and i wanted to inform you to apply for this position. Also, this job suits you because the managers of this department was looking for a person who has familiarity with italian language. In addition, I wanted to say that as you are my best friend, you would able to send your resume to me in order to pave the way for you by giving the documentation to manager ,and speaking about you to him, and morovers, i would highlight your abilities for such vacancy.

I am waiting to receive promptly your documnetations regarding this job.

All the best,

Amir

213 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

November 24, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

7.0 covers the requirements of the task

6.0 there may be inconsistencies in tone

7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended

6.0 presents a purpose that is generally clear

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

6.0 uses paragraphing, but not always logically

6.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do

7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

Feedback:

Overall, this letter attempts to assist a friend in finding a job opportunity in Turkey, and it conveys a positive and supportive message. However, there are several language and formatting issues that need to be addressed for clarity and correctness. The letter starts well by introducing the purpose, but there are minor grammatical issues. It could be rephrased as: "I am writing in response to your request regarding job opportunities in my residential area, Turkey." Also, the description of the job opportunity for Alex could be more detailed and structured. Mentioning the specific skills required for the position and how Alex is qualified would be beneficial.

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The 6.0 sample upgraded to 7.0+

Dear Alex,

I hope this letter finds you well. It's wonderful to hear from you, and I'm thrilled that you're considering the possibility of working in our country. I believe I might have found a job opportunity that could be a great fit for you.

There's an opening at a local company , and it seems tailor-made for someone with your skills and background. The position is for a clerk, and it primarily involves managing client accounts, conducting market research, and developing marketing meetings.

I think this job would be ideal for you because it matches perfectly with your qualifications and experience. Going back to your background experience in that stock office, I believe you would excel in this role and make a valuable contribution to the company.

to apply for the job, you can visit the company's website WWW.GYTTECH.COM or send your resume and cover letter to GYTTECH@gmail.com . Don't forget to highlight your international experience and any other qualifications that make you an outstanding candidate.

I'm excited about the possibility of having you here, and I'll be more than happy to assist you with any additional information or support you might need during the application process. Best of luck with your job hunt, and I hope to hear good news from you soon!

Warm Regards,

213 words