IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3212 – Band 6.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel.

Write a letter to the singer. In your letter:

say how you feel about his/her performance

give details of your music-related activities

explain how you would like him/her to help you with your music-related activities

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

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Disclaimer

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Candidate’s Response:

Dear Alex

I am writing to you regarding your performance in a concert which was recently held in town.

Firstly, I was very happy after a couple of days of holding concert in which you were professional in line with other singers and accompanying them in group was influential, voice was profound amongst others.

As, I would like to be in a band in which I could play, I wanted to explain about my activities. I was six years old when started learning an instrument the was guitar; then, I went to a school to larn how to sing. Although it was not my interest, I continued my education at university which was related to how to play different instrument especially guitar.

In addition, as you are very famous in your band, and could speak the rest of band to accept me as a new guitarist, I would ask you to pave this way for me, and allow me to show my ability in such a great band. Moreover, I could boost my skill beside other guitarists.

I am looking forward to hearing from you regarding your decision

best wishes,

190 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

November 25, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

6.0 addresses the requirements of the task

6.0 there may be inconsistencies in tone

6.0 presents and adequately highlights bullet points but details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate

6.0 presents a purpose that is generally clear

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0 arranges information and ideas coherently

6.0 there is a clear overall progression

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

6.0 uses paragraphing, but not always logically

6.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation

9.0 the communication is completely natural

7.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The task is only minimally addressed. The rubric instructs us “clearly” to give “details”, i.e., specific dates, school names (fictional names are acceptable), specific references, and even the type of guitar played. There are too many complex sentences that make up a paragraph. In the formal text, one sentence cannot constitute a paragraph all on its own (see the first body paragraph). Uncontrolled complexity may also cause disruption in sentence structures.

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The 6.0 sample upgraded to 7.0+

Dear Sir

I hope this letter finds you in high spirits. I recently had the immense pleasure of attending your concert, and I wanted to take a moment to express how deeply impressed I was with your performance.

Your voice and stage presence left an indelible mark on me. Your passion for music shines through, and the way you connect with the audience is truly remarkable. Your performance was extraordinary.

I, too, have a strong affinity for music. I'm actively involved in composing songs and creating lyrics. Your music has been a great source of inspiration for me.

I'm writing to you today with a humble request. Given your immense talent and experience, I would greatly appreciate any guidance or mentorship to help me further develop my music-related activities. Your insights would mean the world to me as I strive to grow as a musician.

If you could spare some time for a conversation or perhaps even collaborate on a project, it would be an incredible honor. Thank you for sharing your incredible talent with the world, and I look forward to the possibility of learning from you.

Warm Regards,

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