IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3209 – Band 6.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel.

Write a letter to the singer. In your letter:

say how you feel about his/her performance

give details of your music-related activities

explain how you would like him/her to help you with your music-related activities

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

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Disclaimer

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Candidate’s Response:

Dear Alex

I am writing to you concerning your performance in the later concert which i attended.

To tell you the truth, your voice is very profound and i have a sense of satisfaction and peaceful which is a result of being in concert in which you performed vey well. As your body language had been coordinated with your voice, so, these two factors contributed to me to have such a great sense at the present.

Also, i would like to give you some information about my activitiy at music in which i play guitar for a local group called ABC, which is not very famous but it is valuable to me to develop my skill. When i was child i started learning the principle of playing guitar by private mentor, but i couldnot continue it until recent years, and this group was an excellent opportunity to me, which involved me into musical activity.

In addition, as i had a geat knowledge about this musical instrument, i would like to join your group in which you since. Although, it was very hard to convince the rest of members to accept me, you could help me enter in your band. Since you are a key element in it and could prove this way to me to play where you sing.

i am looking forward to hearing from you in this regard, as soon as possible.

best wishes.

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

November 16, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

7.0 covers the requirements of the task

6.0 there may be inconsistencies in tone

6.0 presents and adequately highlights bullet points but details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate

6.0 presents a purpose that is generally clear

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

6.0 there is a clear overall progression

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

6.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The tone is mixed; some part of the letter is informal and friendly, while in some parts, it is very formal and respectful. While this mix is necessary, the tone must remain at a certain level throughout the letter. For instance, in this letter, we can replace “looking forward to …” with “I can’t wait to read your response …”

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The 6.0 sample upgraded to 7.0+

Dear Sir/Madam

I hope this letter finds you in good health and high spirits. I had the immense pleasure of attending your concert recently, and I felt compelled to express my heartfelt admiration for your outstanding performance.

Your singing was nothing short of extraordinary, and it left a lasting impression on me. Your vocal range, emotive delivery, and stage presence were truly remarkable, and I was deeply moved by the experience. Your talent is undeniable, and I believe you have a remarkable future ahead in the music industry.

As for myself, I have a strong passion for music, particularly singing. I have been actively involved in local choirs and have taken vocal lessons to improve my skills. Your performance has inspired me to pursue my musical interests more seriously.

I would be immensely grateful if you could offer me some guidance or mentorship in my music-related activities. Your expertise and experience would be invaluable in helping me develop my singing abilities and understanding of the music industry.

Once again, thank you for sharing your incredible talent with the world. I look forward to any advice or support you may provide to assist me in my musical journey.

Regards

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