IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3206 – Band 6.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

correct the information in the article

explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information

suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

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Disclaimer

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Candidate’s Response:

Dear Sir or Madam

I am writing to you concerning an article which I have read about in your magazine on 11 september that it has given wrong information about my city, in terms of population and local language.

First of all, the population of my city is far from the number which you have published in your article, it is about three million people, that is one million people more than what you mentioned. Moreover, the local language is Azari which is rich and well-known in this city, against to what the article has claimed that the local tongue is shirazi and it has been disappeared in recent years.

Also, it is very important for the magazine to impart true and reliable information because the magazine is very famous and has a lot of reviewers throughout the word, in which people could have different insight about culture of people and lead them to misunderstanding about native language and the number of people who peak it. So, it is of significant importance not to underestimate it.

As a result, you should hire knowledgeable staff in your magazine, who are familiar with local people and culture of my city

I will appreciate you to consider these matters in your next article about my city.

Yours faithfully,

215 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

October 3, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

7.0 covers the requirements of the task

7.0 with the tone consistent and appropriate

7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended

9.0 presents a clear purpose

7.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

6.0 there is a clear overall progression

5.0 makes inadequate, inaccurate, or over-use of cohesive devices

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

6.0 uses paragraphing, but not always logically

5.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. There is a huge difference in meaning between past simple and present perfect simple tenses. In this case, the article was published on a certain day and it was over then and there, so past simple should be our dominant tense.

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The 6.0 sample upgraded to 7.0+

Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing to address a recent issue I encountered while reading the article about my town in your esteemed magazine. While I appreciate the coverage given to our town, I must point out some inaccuracies in the information presented.

The article states that our town's population is around 100,000. In reality, our town has a population of approximately 70,000, according to the latest census data. This is a significant discrepancy that needs correction to provide readers with accurate information.

It is crucial for your magazine to provide accurate information because it serves as a valuable source of travel-related knowledge for a global audience. Incorrect information can mislead travelers, resulting in misunderstandings and potentially negative experiences. Ensuring accuracy enhances the credibility of your publication and fosters trust among your readers.

To rectify this situation, I kindly suggest publishing a correction or an updated article with the accurate information about our town's population. This will demonstrate your commitment to providing reliable content and maintain the magazine's reputation for accuracy and integrity.

Thank you for your attention to this matter. I trust that you will take the necessary steps to rectify the inaccuracies and continue to provide valuable and precise information to your readers.

Sincerely,

150 words