IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3205 – Band 5.5

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

explain why you would like the job

give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ

say how you would spend your free time while you’re in Australia

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Candidate’s Response:

Dear Sir or Madam

I am writing to you about an advertisement in which I have read about caring for a six-year-old child and living with a family for six months. At first, I have a tendency to get this job because the framework is related to child rather than working at the office which could be tedious

So, working in an environment like this could be appealing to me. In addition, i am very glad to inform you as i had been working in elementary school for two years, i would be the right person to get involved in this job.

Being with children at school and interacting with them during the day for two years, it has given me a complete insight towards them, which could be useful for your child when i could apply it for him or her. For example, I could entertain him or her by reducing issues like solving a puzzle which is informative and entertaining. Also, i would like to say an issue which might be important for your decision regarding this employment, which is, i would spend my leisure time on a charity that works with underprivileged children.

I would be appreciated if you let me know about your decision.

Best regards.

Amir

211 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

November 14, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 5.5 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

5.0 generally addresses the task; the format may be inappropriate in places

6.0 there may be inconsistencies in tone

5.0 presents, but inadequately covers, bullet points; there may be a tendency to focus on details

5.0 may present a purpose for the letter that is unclear at times

5.0

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0 arranges information and ideas coherently

6.0 there is a clear overall progression

5.0 makes inadequate, inaccurate, or over-use of cohesive devices

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

5.0 may not write in paragraphs, or paragraphing may be inadequate

5.0

Lexical Resource

6.0 uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

5.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The letter doesn’t sound very convincing for the position. The details are not clear enough, e.g. the candidate worked in an elementary school but the details of the job is never mentioned. In general, much more detail is needed.

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The 5.5 sample upgraded to 7.0+

Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing to express my keen interest in the position advertised in an Australian magazine, which involves living with your family for six months and caring for your six-year-old child.

The reason I am enthusiastic about this job is my genuine affection for children and my dedication to providing them with a supportive and nurturing environment. My past experience as a babysitter and tutor has equipped me with the essential skills to create a secure and stimulating atmosphere for your child.

I am a responsible, patient, and adaptable individual, crucial qualities for childcare. Furthermore, I hold certifications in first aid and CPR, ensuring your child's safety is my top priority.

During my free time in Australia, I plan to explore the country's rich culture, beautiful landscapes, and engage in community activities to enhance my experience.

Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to discussing how I can contribute to your family's well-being.

Sincerely,

156 words