IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3204 – Band 5.5

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

explain why you would like the job

give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ

say how you would spend your free time while you’re in Australia

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Family and Relationships, Task 1 Letter, Work and Employment, Writing samples, Writing topics

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Candidate’s Response:

I am writing about an advertisement which i have seen in a magazine that is related to your family. I have understand that you are looking forward to a person to live with you and care for your six-yesr-old child. I am interested in a job that is directly related to children because it involves me iinto affairs which are associated to children; for example, entertaining them with toy and in this way, i could fo away with hectic life which is a source of stress. As I have studied teaching at university and hold a degree in this regard as well as i have been working as a teacher at elementary school, know about children and i am familiar with different aspects of children;

for example, how to teach a subject in a way that to be understandable. Therefore, i could be a right person for this job, and I could interact with your child in a way that to be informative and teach him/her simple issues like making a building with toys. Regarding to leisure time while i am in Australia, i would like to visit parts and jogging in streets as it gives me a sense of satisfaction and i could concentrate on my ambitions which are related to setting up a school for children, later, for next year.

I am looking forward to hearing good news from you.

Best regards.

234 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

November 13, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 5.5 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

5.0 generally addresses the task; the format may be inappropriate in places

6.0 there may be inconsistencies in tone

5.0 presents, but inadequately covers, bullet points; there may be a tendency to focus on details

5.0 may present a purpose for the letter that is unclear at times

5.0

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0 arranges information and ideas coherently

6.0 there is a clear overall progression

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

5.0 may not write in paragraphs, or paragraphing may be inadequate

6.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

5.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. One thing is clear; the parents will not hire this person, why? Simply because there is no tangible information about the candidate or clear references where the employer can inquire from.

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The 5.5 sample upgraded to 7.0+

Dear Sir/Madam

I hope this letter finds you well. I recently saw an advertisement in an Australian magazine about the opportunity to live with your family for six months and care for your charming six-year-old child. I am writing to express my sincere interest in this unique position.

My enthusiasm for this role stems from my deep love for child development and nurturing young minds. With a background in early childhood education and valuable experience working with children, I am confident in my ability to provide a safe, nurturing, and enriching environment for your child.

My qualifications include [mention relevant qualifications, certifications, or experiences], which have equipped me with the necessary skills to engage with children effectively. I believe in fostering a stimulating environment through educational activities, outdoor adventures, and creative play.

In my free time in Australia, I plan to explore the rich cultural heritage, natural beauty, and vibrant communities your country has to offer. I am also eager to immerse myself in the local culture and engage in volunteer work to give back to the community.

I am excited about the possibility of joining your family and contributing to your child's growth and happiness. Thank you for considering my application.

Sincerely, Julia

150 words