IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3200– Band 6.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

explain why you would like the job

give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ

say how you would spend your free time while you’re in Australia

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Task 1 Letter, Work and Employment, Writing samples, Writing topics

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Candidate’s Response:

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to apply for the job, which you have advertised in Australian magazine about taking care of your child who is six years old.

I would be over the moon to have this opportunity due in part to it is temporary job and I can work for six months while I am between jobs. I used to work in a kindergarten but it called off for some months because of this pandemic virus. Therefore, it would be a great chance for me to use my time and earn money until the world backs to normal days.

I assure you I can do this job very well because I studied psychology of kids at university and also I do know numerous games which children find it interesting and funny. I am not talking about ordinary games but the ones that help them to think though it is physical. Needless to say that I am trained to be responsible and consider safety of children in priority.

I also want to use my spare time in visiting different monuments and learn about Australian cultures. I believe there are a lot to learn.

I hope I can be nominated for this job and see your lovely child very soon.
Please let me know if I am appropriate for this job.

Faithfully yours,

228 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

April 6, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The letter could be more realistic by referring to the date or id of the ad, mentioning the name of the family instead of a generic opening, i.e. addressing the family by their name.

Kasra Sharifan

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

7.0 covers the requirements of the task

7.0 with the tone consistent and appropriate

7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended

6.0 presents a purpose that is generally clear

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

6.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The letter could be more realistic by referring to the date or id of the ad, mentioning the name of the family instead of a generic opening, i.e. addressing the family by their name.

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The 6.0 sample upgraded to 7.0+

Dear Sir/Madam

I hope this letter finds you well. Having come across the advertisement in an Australian magazine for the position of living with your family and caring for your six-year-old child, I am writing to express my sincere interest in the opportunity.

I am drawn to this job due to my passion for childcare and cultural exchange. With a background in early childhood education and extensive experience working with children, I am confident in my ability to provide a nurturing and supportive environment for your child. My patient and responsible nature, coupled with a genuine love for fostering children's development, makes me well-suited for this role.

Furthermore, my dedication to creating a positive and engaging atmosphere aligns with your family values. In my free time, I plan to explore the rich cultural diversity of Australia, immersing myself in local activities and events. I am eager to contribute not only as a caregiver but also as a responsible and respectful member of your household.

Thank you for considering my application. I am looking forward to the possibility of discussing my suitability for the position further.

Yours sincerely,

189 words