IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3157 – Band 7.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Your son is learning a second language at school, but he needs some extra lessons.

Write a letter to a teacher asking for help. In your letter.

explain why your son needs help

ask the teacher about her teaching experience and methods

and suggest a possible schedule for the lessons

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

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Candidate’s Response:

Dear Ms. Smith;

I am writing to find out whether you have free time to put into teaching my son some after- school English classes.

I need to mention that my son got seriously sick with the new corona virus about two months ago, so according to the heath instructions which have been imposed and strictly enforced by the government he wasn’t able to participate in his classes for over a month. Now, it’s been about five weeks since he restarted going to school but despite his hard work he is worried for being behind his lessons.

However, since my son’s English exam is due next month, I am looking for a skillful and experienced teacher to prepare him for the test. Considering your reputation as an English teacher in the city, I would like to know your experience of working with adolescents and the methods you utilize to bring up English level of your students in short time. Since my son is at school on weekdays, my recommended schedule for at least four sessions per week is as follows.

Weekdays anytime from 15:00 to 20:00.

Weekends anytime from 9:00 a.m. to 20:00.

As time is a big issue here, I am sure you would answer me as soon as possible.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully;

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

March 7, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently

8.0 presents, highlights and illustrates bullet points clearly and appropriately

9.0 details are fully and clearly extended.

9.0 presents a clear purpose

8.0

Coherence and Cohesion

9.0 sequences information and ideas logically

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

7.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation

9.0 the communication is completely natural

7.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free

7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors

7.0 they do not impede communication

7.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. Task Achievement (TA):
The letter addresses the three main points of the task: explaining why the son needs help, asking about the teacher's experience and methods, and suggesting a possible schedule. The explanation of your son's situation due to illness is clear and relevant. However, the request for the teacher's teaching experience and methods could be more direct and detailed.

Coherence and Cohesion (CC):
The letter is well-organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The transition between ideas is smooth, but you could improve coherence by using more varied linking words and phrases. For instance, instead of starting a new paragraph with "However," you might use "In light of this," or "Therefore," to better connect the ideas.

Lexical Resource (LR):
Your vocabulary is appropriate for the task. The use of phrases like "skillful and experienced teacher" and "bring up English level" are effective. However, consider varying your word choice to avoid repetition, such as using synonyms for "experience" and "schedule."

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA):
There are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasings. For example, "b his hard work he is worried for being behind his lessons" is unclear and should be rephrased for clarity. Pay attention to sentence structure and punctuation, such as the use of semicolons and commas.

Overall:
The letter meets the task requirements but could benefit from clearer expression and more detailed inquiries regarding the teacher's qualifications and teaching style. Attention to grammatical accuracy and sentence variety will enhance the overall effectiveness of the letter.

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Dear Mr. Bonni,

I hope this message finds you well. I am writing regarding my son's progress in learning a second language at school. While he is diligently engaged in the curriculum, I've observed a need for supplementary lessons to further enhance his proficiency.

My son, Alex Ros, is encountering some challenges in grasping certain language concepts, leading to a slower pace of learning compared to his peers. As a concerned parent, I believe additional guidance and targeted support would greatly benefit his language acquisition.

I would appreciate insight into your teaching experience and methods, particularly in assisting students who might require extra attention. Understanding your approach will help me ascertain its alignment with my son's learning style.

Could we possibly arrange supplementary lessons twice a week, preferably on Tuesdays and Thursdays, for an hour each? Your guidance during these sessions would be immensely valuable in bolstering my son's language skills.

I am eager to collaborate with you to ensure my son's educational progress. Your expertise and guidance are highly regarded, and I am hopeful for a positive response. Thank you for your attention to this matter.

Warm Regards,

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