IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3101 – Band 7.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You are going to have a family party in a private room in a hotel.

Write a letter to the hotel manager and say:

why you need to use this private room

what you need them to provide for the party

inquire about the price of the food you are ordering

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

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The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Candidate’s Response:

Dear Sir/Madam ,

I am writing to inquire about the rental of the conference hall of your fine hotel . As you might want to know the occasion , I am planning to throw a family party to celebrate my parents’ 30st anniversary . I have heard so many compliments about the private room and your attentive service that I am keen to rent it on 5^thof October for this family celebration . If your hall is available on this day , I shall ask if there are any particular decorations available in that venue . If not , I wonder whether you could provide some helium baloons in different colours , two large tables for putting flowers on , a big sign that says “Happy Anniversary” , and some large baskets of flowers , preferably containing Lillies and Roses .

I also have some ideas about the cuisins , which I would like to be served . I believe a dish of chicken breast , pork chop , Salmon with vegetable garnish would be nice , off course if that will not be too expensive . I would like to know the price of this dish , as well as any other suggestions that you might have for the dinner .

I look forward to receiving your answer at your convenience .

Yours Faithfully,

229 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

January 25, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The letter has appropriately addressed all three points in the prompt – the reason for needing the private room, what you need for the party, and the inquiry about food prices. The purpose of the letter is clear, and the information is well-organized.

It has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. The ideas are logically presented, and there is a smooth flow between sentences and paragraphs.

It also uses a varied and appropriate range of vocabulary. There are some minor errors and awkward phrases, such as "30st" instead of "30th," but overall, the vocabulary is strong. Regarding grammar, there are some minor errors and awkward phrasing, such as "I have heard so many compliments" (received so many compliments as if it is something unpleasant) and "balloons" (corrected spelling). Some sentences are a bit complex, and there is a mix of simple and complex structures.

Overall, the response meets the requirements of the task, and the language used is generally accurate and varied.

Kasra Sharifan

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

9.0 fully satisfies all the requirements of the task

8.0 presents, highlights and illustrates bullet points clearly and appropriately

7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended

9.0 presents a clear purpose

7.0

Coherence and Cohesion

9.0 sequences information and ideas logically

8.0 manages all aspects of cohesion well

9.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

8.0

Lexical Resource

9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation

9.0 the communication is completely natural

7.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free

9.0 rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’

9.0 communication is completely natural

7.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The letter has appropriately addressed all three points in the prompt – the reason for needing the private room, what you need for the party, and the inquiry about food prices. The purpose of the letter is clear, and the information is well-organized.

It has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. The ideas are logically presented, and there is a smooth flow between sentences and paragraphs.

It also uses a varied and appropriate range of vocabulary. There are some minor errors and awkward phrases, such as "30st" instead of "30th," but overall, the vocabulary is strong. Regarding grammar, there are some minor errors and awkward phrasing, such as "I have heard so many compliments" (received so many compliments as if it is something unpleasant) and "balloons" (corrected spelling). Some sentences are a bit complex, and there is a mix of simple and complex structures.

Overall, the response meets the requirements of the task, and the language used is generally accurate and varied.

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Dear Sir/Madam

I trust this letter finds you well. I am writing to inquire about reserving a private room at your hotel for a family party. We have chosen your venue for its excellent reputation and inviting atmosphere.

The purpose of our gathering is to celebrate a special family occasion, and we believe that a private room would offer the perfect setting for our event. We kindly request your assistance in providing a comfortable space that can accommodate our guests.

Additionally, we would like to inquire about the catering options available for the event. Could you please provide details on the prices of the food items you offer for such occasions? We are keen to ensure our guests have a delightful culinary experience.

Thank you for your attention to these matters. We look forward to your prompt response and appreciate your assistance in making our family celebration memorable.

Sincerely,

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