IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 2998– Band 7.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
  • give details of your study plans
  • explain why you want to get a part-time job
  • suggest how your friend could help you find a job
  • Write at least 150 words.

    You do NOT need to write any addresses.

    Begin your letter as follows:

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    The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

    Candidate’s Response:

    Dear Mike,

    I’m super excited to finally move to London to start my Master’s degree. I’m a little bit concerned about paying the expenses, so I decided to find a part-time job to earn some money along with my studies. I’m writing this letter to see if you can do me a favor in this regard.

    Let me first give you a background of my study schedules. Since it’s the first semester, I decided to select only 3 courses, and I did my best to have room for my future career as well. As a result, I go to university on Mondays and Tuesdays.

    On the rest of the working days and even on holidays I can get busy with a job to pay the high costs of living. Everything seems to cost a fortune in London! I really don’t know how people can afford living there. Thank God I already have a scholarship to afford the university tuition.

    Having this said, I really look forward to your support to find a suitable job. I was thinking about working at a cafe or restaurant as a waiter. I would really appreciate it if you can take a look around the diners near my university to see if there are any job openings. If you could find any, please take a photo using your mobile phone, so I can give them a call.

    Thanks for the favor, and I owe you one.

    All the best,

    245 words
    Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

    Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

    May 28, 2024

    This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

    Disclaimer

    The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

    IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

    Task Achievement (GT)
    8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently
    8.0 presents, highlights and illustrates bullet points clearly and appropriately
    9.0 details are fully and clearly extended.
    9.0 presents a clear purpose
    8.0
    Coherence and Cohesion
    9.0 sequences information and ideas logically
    8.0 manages all aspects of cohesion well
    6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical
    9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
    8.0 uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately
    6.0
    Lexical Resource
    9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary
    8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation
    8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation
    9.0 the communication is completely natural
    8.0
    Grammatical Range and Accuracy
    9.0 uses a wide range of structures
    7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences
    8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies
    7.0 they do not impede communication
    7.0
    7.0

    Feedback:

    Thank you indeed for writing this letter.
    Task Achievement (TA):
    The letter addresses all the requirements of the task, including providing details of study plans, explaining the need for a part-time job, and suggesting how the friend can help. The purpose of the letter is clear, and the writer's request is well-explained. However, the closing paragraph could be slightly more formal to match the tone of the request.

    Coherence and Cohesion (CC):
    The letter is logically organized with a clear structure. The writer uses paragraphs effectively to separate different points. There is a good use of cohesive devices to link ideas, such as "Since," "As a result," "On the rest of the working days," and "Having this said." However, the transition from explaining the study schedule to the high costs of living could be smoother.

    Lexical Resource (LR):
    The letter demonstrates a good range of vocabulary appropriate to the task. Phrases like "super excited," "concerned about paying the expenses," and "high costs of living" are well-used. Some informal expressions, such as "I owe you one," fit the context but could be refined for a slightly more formal tone.

    Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA):
    The letter uses a variety of grammatical structures, including complex sentences and different tenses, accurately. There are minor errors, such as "a tuition" instead of "a tuition fee" and "take a look around the diners" instead of "take a look around the cafés and restaurants." These errors do not significantly impede communication but could be improved.

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    Hey Mike,
    I hope this letter finds you well. I’m excited to share that I’ll soon be moving to London to start my Master’s degree. While I’m looking forward to this new chapter, I’m concerned about managing the high living expenses. Therefore, I plan to find a part-time job to support myself financially during my studies.
    For my first semester, I’ve chosen three courses, with classes only on Mondays and Tuesdays. This leaves the rest of the weekdays and weekends free for a job. Living costs in London are quite high, and I’m grateful for my scholarship covering tuition. However, I still need to earn money for daily expenses.
    I am reaching out to ask for your help in finding a part-time job. I’m interested in working at a café or restaurant as a waiter. Checking the local diners near my university for any job openings would be incredibly helpful.
    Taking a photo of the postings and sending them to me would be greatly appreciated. Thank you so much for your assistance. I truly appreciate your support.
    Take care,
    179 words

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