IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 2995– Band 7.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
  • explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
  • say how your work could be done while you are away
  • ask for his/her help in arranging it
  • Write at least 150 words.

    You do NOT need to write any addresses.

    Begin your letter as follows:

    Disclaimer

    The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

    Candidate’s Response:

    Dear Mr. Johnson,

    I am writing to request that you relocate me to the headquarters in London from 1 April for a six-month period. Allow me to elaborate on the reason behind this request, how I am proposing to handle my current responsibilities, and the support I require from your side in this regard.

    The primary reason for this request is that I was recently informed by the Human Resources division about a full-fledged training program on online sales management that will be held at headquarters during the mentioned period. You know how eager I am to expand my knowledge and learn online sales concepts, especially through social media marketing. Thus, it would mean a lot to me if you could accept this request.

    During my leave, I can delegate all my responsibilities to Mike, the intern we recruited 4 months ago. He proved to be bright and competent enough during his probation period. Now is a great time to give him more responsibilities and evaluate him in real-world situations. In addition, I will guarantee to assist him remotely if he encounters any issues.

    If you can accept him as my delegate during my leave, I would really appreciate it if you wrote to Mr. Brown, the head of the HR training department, and approved my enrollment in this program. I have already submitted my request, and it is awaiting your approval.

    Thank you so much for your support, and I look forward to your approval.

    Best regards,

    253 words

    Planning Stage

    Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

    Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

    June 3, 2024

    This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

    Disclaimer

    The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

    IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

    Task Achievement (GT)
    7.0 covers the requirements of the task
    8.0 presents, highlights and illustrates bullet points clearly and appropriately
    7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended
    9.0 presents a clear purpose
    7.0
    Coherence and Cohesion
    9.0 sequences information and ideas logically
    8.0 manages all aspects of cohesion well
    9.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately
    9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
    8.0 uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately
    8.0
    Lexical Resource
    7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
    8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation
    8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation
    9.0 the communication is completely natural
    7.0
    Grammatical Range and Accuracy
    7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
    8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free
    8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies
    9.0 communication is completely natural
    7.0
    7.0

    Feedback:

    Thank you indeed for writing this letter.
    Task Achievement (TA):
    The letter addresses all parts of the task effectively. It explains the reason for the request, how work will be managed, and asks for the manager’s help. Some points could be more specific, such as additional details about the training program and more assurance about handling responsibilities remotely.

    Coherence and Cohesion (CC):
    The letter is well-organized, with clear paragraphs and logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used appropriately, though some transitions could be smoother. For instance, the shift from explaining the reason for the request to delegating responsibilities could be more seamless.

    Lexical Resource (LR):
    A good range of vocabulary is used accurately, with phrases like "relocate," "elaborate," and "competent." There are minor lapses in word choice and usage, such as "4 months ago" should be spelled out as "four months ago."

    Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA):
    A variety of sentence structures are used, including complex and compound sentences. There are minor grammatical errors, such as "Allow me to elaborate on the reason behind this request" (awkward phrasing) and "if you wrote" (should be "if you could write").

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    Dear Sir/Madam
    I am writing to request a six-month relocation to our headquarters in London starting 1 April. Allow me to elaborate on the reason behind this request, how I am proposing to handle my current responsibilities, and the support I require from you.
    I was recently informed by the Human Resources division about a comprehensive training program on online sales management that will be held at the headquarters during this period. Given my eagerness to expand my knowledge, particularly in social media marketing, this opportunity would be invaluable. Thus, it would mean a lot to me if you could accept this request.
    During my leave, I propose delegating my responsibilities to Mike, the intern we recruited four months ago. He has demonstrated competence during his probation period, and this would be an excellent chance to evaluate him in a more significant role. In addition, I will assist him remotely if any issues arise.
    If you approve Mike as my delegate, I would appreciate it if you could inform Mr. Brown, the head of the HR training department, and endorse my enrollment in this program. I have already submitted my request, and it is awaiting your approval. Thank you for your support, and I look forward to your positive response.
    Best regards,
    185 words

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