IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 2988 – Band 7.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You are studying for a qualification, and you would like some time off from your work to complete it.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
  • ask for some time off to complete the qualification
  • suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off
  • say how the qualification will help your job or company
  • Write at least 150 words.

    You do NOT need to write any addresses.

    Begin your letter as follows:

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    The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

    Candidate’s Response:

    Dear Mr. Smith,

    I hope that this letter finds you well. I am writing this to request a study leave from Feb 1st to Mar 15th. Allow me to elaborate the situation.

    As you know, I am pursuing my master’s degree at University of London for three years now, and I have only used the weekends and my personal time after work to do so. However, to finalize my study, I need some time off work to be able to focus on my thesis and persuade my supervisor that it is ready to be published. Thus, I would really appreciate it if you could accept my leave request during this time.

    I know this is a huge favor to ask, considering the intense sales targets for 2020, but I am committed to return this favor by working during holidays for three consecutive months to meet the targets. I know it might be difficult, but that is the price I am willing to pay for studying along with my career.

    In addition, I am hopeful that you will appreciate that this qualification will help me in the sales negotiations with our clients as well. This is primarily because I can use the novel sales approaches that I am going to propose in my thesis in practice.

    Looking forward to your approval.

    Best Regards,

    224 words
    Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

    Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

    May 22, 2024

    This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

    Disclaimer

    The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

    IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

    Task Achievement (GT)
    8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently
    8.0 presents, highlights and illustrates bullet points clearly and appropriately
    9.0 details are fully and clearly extended.
    9.0 presents a clear purpose
    8.0
    Coherence and Cohesion
    7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
    8.0 manages all aspects of cohesion well
    9.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately
    9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
    7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
    7.0
    Lexical Resource
    9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary
    7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
    8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation
    9.0 the communication is completely natural
    7.0
    Grammatical Range and Accuracy
    7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
    8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free
    9.0 rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’
    9.0 communication is completely natural
    7.0
    7.0

    Feedback:

    Thank you for writing this letter.
    Task Achievement(TA):
    The letter addresses all parts of the prompt, clearly asking for time off, suggesting compensation for the leave, and explaining how the qualification will benefit the company. The purpose of the letter is clear, and the request is made politely. Some minor details could be elaborated further, such as more specifics on how the new qualification will benefit the company.

    Coherence and Cohesion (CC):
    The letter is well-organized, with a logical flow of ideas.
    Cohesive devices are used effectively, but there are minor lapses in coherence, such as in the transition between asking for leave and explaining its benefits.

    Lexical Resource (LR):
    A range of vocabulary is used appropriately, with some attempts at less common lexical items (e.g., "novel sales approaches," "persuade my supervisor").
    There are a few minor errors in word choice and collocation (e.g., "persuade my supervisor" should be "convince my supervisor" or "demonstrate to my supervisor").

    Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA):
    A variety of sentence structures are used, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward constructions (e.g., "pursuing my master's degree at University of London for three years now" should be "have been pursuing my master's degree at the University of London for three years now").
    Errors do not impede communication but are noticeable.

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    Dear Sir/Madam
    I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to request some time off from work to focus on completing my ongoing qualification. As you may know, I have been dedicating considerable time and effort to my studies outside of work hours, and I believe that taking some time off will allow me to make significant progress towards completing the qualification.
    During my absence, I plan to use the time efficiently by dedicating myself fully to my studies and ensuring that I meet all necessary deadlines and requirements. Additionally, I intend to use any spare time to enhance my skills and knowledge in areas relevant to my role within the company.
    I firmly believe that obtaining this qualification will greatly benefit both my job performance and the company as a whole. It will equip me with valuable skills and expertise that I can apply directly to my role, ultimately contributing to the success and growth of our organization.
    Thank you for considering my request. I am more than willing to discuss further details or make necessary arrangements to ensure minimal disruption to workflow during my absence.
    Yours sincerely,
    193 words

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