IELTS Writing Task 1 sample 3334 - Band 6.5 - IELTS Juice Online Academy

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend in your letter say:

why he/she would not enjoy going to college

explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her

suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her.

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Task 1 Letter, Writing samples

Dear Smith,

I’m writing to you related to the question which you asked me. it would be better to go to the college or getting a job.

in this regard, I think that it would be an excellent idea to get a job rather than going to the college. the cost of taking the course in college would be high for you. along with the cost of accommodation, the situation will be getting worse because the college won’t for wide you with a place to reside.

for these reasons which I mentioned, finding the job would be the best solution for you. the salary for a programmer Like you would be remarkable, you can even save your money. it is customary that employers provide an accommodation for their workplaces. this policy would reduce extra expenses which you might have.

Although, getting a job as programmer would suit you Other jobs like teaching programming lessons in vocational institutes would be possible, as such organizations have lack of qualify the specialists like you.

I hope that my recommendations be useful for you. anyway you can rely on me as an intimate friend in case of any problem.

Best regards,

Amir

198 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

August 12, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The number of errors is low which is indeed a huge plus, but regarding task achievement, the third bullet point says “Suggest types of job …” which clearly demands more than one job suggestion, but the letter suggests only one. Grammar-wise, there are attempts to use complex grammatical structures but with mixed control. The first paragraph is responsible for the 6.0 in Coherence and Cohesion; sentences should be linked properly with accurate linking words.

Kasra Sharifan

IELTS Writing Band Descriptor:

Task Achievement (GT)

6.0 addresses the requirements of the task

7.0 with the tone consistent and appropriate

6.0 presents and adequately highlights bullet points but details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate

6.0 presents a purpose that is generally clear

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

6.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation

9.0 the communication is completely natural

7.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors

7.0 they do not impede communication

7.0

6.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The number of errors is low which is indeed a huge plus, but regarding task achievement, the third bullet point says “Suggest types of job …” which clearly demands more than one job suggestion, but the letter suggests only one. Grammar-wise, there are attempts to use complex grammatical structures but with mixed control. The first paragraph is responsible for the 6.0 in Coherence and Cohesion; sentences should be linked properly with accurate linking words.

The IELTS Assessor

Kasra Sharifan

Co-founder and CFO

British Council certified English teacher, IDP-trained IELTS instructor, content writer, editor-in-chief, co-founder, and Chief Financial Officer (CFO) at IELTS Juice Online Academy.

A very good sample

Dear Michael,

I hope you're doing well. I received your letter and wanted to share my thoughts on your decision between going to college or getting a job. In my opinion, pursuing a job would be a more suitable choice for you.

Firstly, I believe college might not align with your interests and strengths. You've always thrived in practical, hands-on situations, while the traditional classroom environment might feel restrictive. College often involves long hours of lectures, academic coursework, and theoretical learning, which might not be your preferred way of acquiring knowledge.

On the other hand, starting a job would provide you with immediate financial independence and the chance to apply your skills in a practical setting. Earning a steady income would enable you to take charge of your financial responsibilities and explore personal interests in your free time.

Considering your excellent communication skills and problem-solving abilities, I suggest looking into roles such as sales, customer service, or project management. These positions would allow you to interact with people, apply your talents effectively, and make a meaningful impact on projects or clients. The dynamic nature of these jobs would likely keep you engaged and motivated.

In conclusion, I believe that pursuing a job would better suit your preferences and strengths. It offers financial independence and the chance to gain valuable real-world experience. I'm confident that this path will lead to a fulfilling and prosperous future.

Best wishes,

190 words