The supplied chart below indicates the precentage of five North American great lakes ice cover during 20 years period from (1973) to (2012).
Moving to the Superior, in 1973 covered nearly, a quarter of ice which in 1992 to 2012 dropped to the almost, 15 percents. However, in Michigan the percentage decreased to approximately, less than a fifth in 1973 and in 2012 reached to roughly, 10 percents in contrast to the Superior that had the massive change in 1973 but then again, there was change intermittently from 1992 to 2012.
In Huron in,1973 reached to nearly, 27 percents and in, 1992 and 2012 jumped to almost, a fifth comparing to the Superior and Michigan which was below than 10 perecnts and 15 percents. That being said In Erie in, 1973 the cover of ice exceeded and reached the vertex which was less than a third and furthermore, from 1992 to 2012 reached to
the highest point which was roughly, 27 percents. Moving to the last lake Ontario remained steady in 1973 and 1992 to 2012 and collapsed in contrast with other four lakes in both periods of time in 1973 touched very small number and in 1992 to 2012 reached to even below than 5 percents.
As an overview trend, there was a massive change from Superior to Ontario during these periods In Erie in both,
1973 and 1992 to 2012 touched the apex and in Ontario touched the lowest point which was one in twenty and below than 5 percents.
The percentage of five North American lakes covered in ice
Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The chart below shows the percentage of five North American lakes covered in ice during two 20-year periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Written By: Kasra Sharifan
April 20, 2023
This is an IELTS writing band 5.0 sample
Thank you indeed for writing this report. The report can use multiple areas to improve its final score; for instance, the use of words like “… it jumped to a fifth …” or phrases like “That being said,” without sufficient context, or grammatical structures like “Moving to the Superior, in 1973 covered nearly, a quarter of ice” where the subject is missing, cause massive confusion for the reader. It is best to produce correct and healthy sentences even if they tend to be more straightforward. The report, however, is successful in identifying and addressing the main areas of the visual although it could have more clarity in reporting data; comparing lakes should have been based on a more logical ground; in other words, the ice-covered area from one lake did not decrease to reach another ice-covered area for another lake; the word “decrease” may not be a good fit here as this comparison does not make much sense.
IELTS Writing Band Descriptor:
Task Achievement (Ac)
8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently
7.0 clearly presents and highlights key features
6.0 details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate
6.0 presents an overview with information appropriately selected
6.0
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
5.0 makes inadequate, inaccurate, or over-use of cohesive devices
6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately
6.0 uses paragraphing, but not always logically
5.0
Lexical Resource
7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy
5.0 may make noticeable errors in spelling and/or word formation
5.0 that may cause some difficulty for the reader
5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do
6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation
5.0 errors can cause some difficulty for the reader
5.0
5.0
Feedback:
Thank you indeed for writing this report. The report can use multiple areas to improve its final score; for instance, the use of words like “… it jumped to a fifth …” or phrases like “That being said,” without sufficient context, or grammatical structures like “Moving to the Superior, in 1973 covered nearly, a quarter of ice” where the subject is missing, cause massive confusion for the reader. It is best to produce correct and healthy sentences even if they tend to be more straightforward. The report, however, is successful in identifying and addressing the main areas of the visual although it could have more clarity in reporting data; comparing lakes should have been based on a more logical ground; in other words, the ice-covered area from one lake did not decrease to reach another ice-covered area for another lake; the word “decrease” may not be a good fit here as this comparison does not make much sense.
A very good sample
The given bar chart depicts the percentage of people living in urban areas in three different continents: Europe, Asia, and Africa.
The chart displays data for the year 2007 and projections for the year 2030. In 2007, Europe had the highest percentage of urban population at around 75%, followed by Asia at approximately 40%, and Africa at only 38%. By 2030, the projections show that Europe's urban population will increase slightly to almost 77%, while Asia's urban population is expected to increase significantly to almost 60%. However, Africa's urban population is expected to experience the most substantial increase, with projections indicating that it will more than double to reach nearly 60%.
In conclusion, the chart illustrates the significant differences in the percentage of people living in urban areas in Europe, Asia, and Africa in 2007, as well as the projections for 2030. It also highlights the expected changes in these percentages by 2030. This chart could be used to discuss the urbanization trends in different regions of the world and their implications for urban planning and sustainable development.
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